2017/1/19 14:39:15來源:新航道作者:新航道
摘要:這篇官方發布的act寫作范文,希望能為考生的act寫作提供一些參考,對于滿分act寫作范文考生可以參考其文章結構和用詞,以便將這些優秀的得分點更好的借鑒,預祝考生在接下來的ACT考試中有出色的發揮。
官方給出了一篇標題為“Intelligent Machines”的act寫作范文,列出了6篇范文,分數從1-6分不等。我們認真閱讀下面的滿分act寫作范文,可以發現新的ACT寫作,依然有章可循。 標題是針對intelligent machines替代人工的現象展開談論,并一共以下三個觀念:
Perspective 1: What we lose with the replacement of people by machines is some part of our own humanity. Even our mundane daily encounters no longer require from us basic courtesy, respect, and tolerance for other people.
Perspective 2: Machines are good at low-skills, repetitive jobs, and at high-speed, extremely precise jobs. In both cases they work better than humans. This efficiency leads to a more prosperous and progressive world for everyone.
Perspective 3: Intelligent machines challenge our long-standing ideas about what humans are or can be. This is good because it pushes both humans and machines toward new, unimagined possibilities.
滿分作文:
As technology improves, and more and more tasks are completed by machines instead of humans, the question is no longer about what we can do with machines, but rather what we should. Although the usage of machines increases efficiency and our standard of living, it detracts from the value of human life. As technology improves, and more and more tasks are completed by machines instead of humans, the question is no longer about what we can do with machines, but rather what we should. Although the usage of machines increases efficiency and our standard of living, it detracts from the value of human life.
As machines increasingly perform all our basic tasks, society is able to produce more. The additional production adds material value to our society and frees people up from these low-skill tasks. This is in agreement with Perspective Two which claims that this industrialization leads to more prosperity. For example, in the 18th century, short-staple cotton that was grown in the Southern United States required an immense amount of labor in order to seperate the seeds from the fiber to process the cotton to make it marketable.
However, in the mid-19th century, Eli Whitney, an American entrepreneur, invented the cotton gin, which allowed for automation of cotton processing. This machine replaced the need of a large work force for the process and greatly improved production. As a result of the cotton gin, short-staple cotton production skyrocketed, increasing by more than 10 times in the South while bringing prosperity to the region and setting in motion a new industrial era in America. This is in agreement with Perspective Three, which says that mechanization allows for “unimagined possibilities”. Although there are clearly many advantages to industrialization, there are also some heavy drawbacks.
The replacement of humans by machines leads to the loss of value to human life, an effect that outweighs the material gains of automation. The search to find human tasks that can be performed by machines inevitably leads to comparisons between the human and the machine. If a company executive wants to see if a inventory management team can be replaced by a robotic system, he will compare the two and determine which can do a better job. When this occurs, the people on the team are evaluated not for their worth as human beings, but for their effectiveness at performing a specific function—in essence, as we would
evaluate a machine. In a larger sense, when we begin to think about humans in this way, the worth of a person’s life becomes dependent on only what they can do and no longer has any intrinsic value. As Perspective One states, we begin to lose our humanity. This new mindset and way of evaluating people, though seemingly harmless in the workplace, is devastating when it begins to pervade a society. If a person is judged only on his or her capability, there is no reason for a person to remain after they have served their function. This would warrant
genocide against the elderly and the disabled because their burden on society would not be made up for by any production. Although the machines may seem to only fulfill the low skill jobs at the moment, there is no barrier to prevent the machines from replacing more. As the machines increase in intelligence, they will replace any tasks done by humans and render us unnecessary and worthless.
Due to the risks of dehumanization, the material benefits of machines are not enough to justify its increasing presence.
However, in the mid-19th century, Eli Whitney, an American entrepreneur, invented the cotton gin, which allowed for automation of cotton processing. This machine replaced the need of a large work force for the process and greatly improved production. As a result of the cotton gin, short-staple cotton production skyrocketed, increasing by more than 10 times in the South while bringing prosperity to the region and setting in motion a new industrial era in America. This is in agreement with Perspective Three, which says that mechanization allows for “unimagined possibilities”. Although there are clearly many advantages to industrialization, there are also some heavy drawbacks.
面對新的ACT作文改革,我們不必恐慌,具體可以從以下幾個方面進行備考復習:
1. 培養邏輯訓練能力:因為新的ACT寫作已經將我們要寫的觀點給出了,我們需要做的就是如何來有邏輯地進行論證。因此,我們需要多閱讀一些議論性質的文章,并注意觀察議論思路的展開。
2. 積累例子:從滿分范文不難看出,例子是評分標準中重要的一環,這個例子盡量不要太生活化(與托福作文區分開來),但是與SAT寫作的例子相比又靈活接地氣一些。
3. 練習:目前官方出來的題目相當有限,但是我們可以采用舊ACT真題的寫作題目進行練習,并讓老師批改找出作文中的邏輯不嚴密和語法不當的地方進行修改。
以上內容為考生分享了官方發布的act寫作范文,希望能為考生的act寫作提供一些參考,對于滿分act寫作范文考生可以參考其文章結構和用詞,以便將這些優秀的得分點更好的借鑒,預祝考生在接下來的ACT考試中有出色的發揮。
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