2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文及解析(社會問題)

  慈善機構charity organisations

  2016年8月20日雅思寫作題目

  Some people think charity organisations should help people in great need wherever they live. However, others think they should help people in their own country. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文-第一段

  Charity organisations are supposed to offer help to people in great need, such as those suffering from incurable diseases, natural disasters and unexpected accidents.Yet one issue is still in debate: to whom should the money of charity organisations go,exclusively to people who live in the same country as the organisations, or to all people regardless of where they live? To my mind, the answer to this question depends largely on the mission of specific charity organisations.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文第一段解析：

  開頭段，先定義charity organisation引出話題，然后重述題目中的問題，最后提出自己的觀點。請注意：唐老師沒有照抄原題，而是對其進行了重新表述，這是語言表達水平的一個重要方面，學生需要不斷練習才能真正提升這個能力。

  such as... 往往能夠給我們提供一個機會來展示我們的知識水平。這里的such as those suffering from...完全可以不要，但正是這個such as后面的內容，讓考官看到了學生的知識面和表達力。

  to my mind,... 是一個很有用的短語，意思為“我認為”。多數學生會使用in my view, in my opinion, as far as I am concerned。

  看一看老師在本段使用的幾個副詞(組)。exclusively = only; regardless of = no matter; largely = mainly

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文-第二段

  One important reason why some people hold the same-country view is that, as they see it, the charity money comes from the rich people and other donators who live in the same country as those needy people, and naturally the charity organisations should help them rather than people from other countries.This is partly true, especially to the local charity groups whose chief concern is to solve the local problems. Yet for such organisations as Bill Gates Charity Foundation whose money comes from the entire world, it is far from enough only to help Americans, although it is headquartered in the U.S. As a matter of fact, Bill Gates Charity Foundation, along with other “global” charity groups, has extended its help to all people in all countries and regions throughout the world.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文第二段解析：

  本段論證不同規模不同性質的慈善機構使用錢的方向不同。區分兩類慈善機構：地區性的和全球性的。

  As they see it,... 在他們看來

  This is partly true,... 這有一半是正確的

  It is far from enough to... 做......遠遠不夠

  As a matter of fact = in fact, actually 事實上

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文-第三段

  Besides, there are charity organisations that address different issues, some of which being daily necessities, others being disease control, environmental protection, to name only a few. Some of these issues are local while others are global in nature. Generally, local charity groups play a more important role in addressing local issues though outside help is also always welcomed, while in face of those global issues like disease control or environmental protection, charity organisations need to travel across territorial borders and offer help to those who live in any part of the world.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文第三段解析：

  本段論證解決不同問題的慈善機構使用錢的方向也不同，將慈善機構分為解決區域問題的機構和解決全球性問題的機構。

  to name only a few相當于“等等”，多數同學會用and so on...

  while在這里引導轉折，相當于but。

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文-第四段

  To conclude, where the charity money should go is mainly determined by the chief concerns and missions of different charity organisations.An organisation aiming at solving local issues should spend its money helping people who live in the same country, but if an organisation sets its eyes on global issues, it should not confine itself to a single country.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文第四段解析：

  本段為結尾段，對前文論述的內容進行重新概括，注意在用語上要與前文保持一定差異。

  必須學習本段用不同句型來表達近似內容的方法。an organisation aiming at solving local issues... = if an organisation aims at solving local issues, it ...

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